Autobiography--draft 2~ paragraph 1,2
17 years ago, March 24th an amazing thing happened. A strong baby girl with many hairs was born in Tainan city. Who is she ? It's me, Vanesa Shi.Who is the tallest person in my family? Of course is my father. My mother is a dependable woman. My older sister is good at math but her English is very bad. My English is better than her but my math is bad. So we can help each other. I love my family very much.
I have many hobbies.First, I like to read novels and comic books. Reading help me relax. And I like to go to the school library.It 's very convenient. Second ,I like to write articles and poem in Chinese. It helps me not only express my feelings but also keep a record of my daily life.
I have many hobbies.First, I like to read novels and comic books. Reading help me relax. And I like to go to the school library.It 's very convenient. Second ,I like to write articles and poem in Chinese. It helps me not only express my feelings but also keep a record of my daily life.
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17 years ago, an amazing thing happened. A strong baby girl with many hairs was born in Tainan City. It's me, Vanesa Shi. My father is the tallest person in my family. My mother is a dependable woman. My older sister is good at math, but her English is very bad. My English is better than hers, but my math is bad. Therefore, we often help each other. I love my family very much.
I have many hobbies. First, I like to read novels and comic books. Reading helps me relax, and I like to go to the school library. It's very convenient. Second, I like to write articles and poems in Chinese. It helps me not only express my feelings but also keep a record of my daily life.
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17 years ago, an amazing thing happened. A strong baby girl with many hairs was born in Tainan City. It's me, Vanesa Shi. My father is the tallest person in my family. He is such a humor person that always let whole family with cheerfulness. My mother is a dependable woman. She teach me how to do housework. My older sister is good at math, but her English is very bad. My English is better than hers, but my math is bad. Therefore, we often help each other. I love my family very much.
I have many hobbies. First, I like to read novels and comic books. Reading helps me relax, and I like to go to the school library. It's very convenient. Reading gives me many knowledge. When I am taking a exam, there no correspondence between some question and what we learn in book. Now what we get from outside reading is useful. Second, I like to write articles and poems in Chinese. It helps me not only express my feelings but also keep a record of my daily life. I had got some prize .I won a prize which is the match of the composition. In conclusion, my hobbies actually helps me a lot in my daily life especially in school.
17 years ago, an amazing thing happened. A strong baby girl with many hairs was born in Tainan City. It's me, Vanesa Shi. My father is the tallest person in my family. He is such a humorous person that he always fills the whole family with cheerfulness. My mother is a dependable woman. She teaches me how to do housework. My older sister is good at math, but her English is very bad. On the contrary, my English is better than math. Therefore, we often help each other. I love my family very much.
I have many hobbies. First, I like to read novels and comic books. Reading helps me relax, and I like to go to my school library. It's very convenient. Reading provides me much knowledge. When I take an exam, there no correspondence between some question and what we learn in book(???). Now what we get from outside reading is useful. Second, I like to write articles and poems in Chinese. It helps me not only express my feelings but also keep a record of my daily life. Besides, I got some prizes, and the most unforgettable is the composition contest. In conclusion, my hobbies actually help me a lot in my daily life, especially in school.
Much better!
I have no iddea about the following sentence, "there no correspondence between some question and what we learn in book."
Can you explain it?
17 years ago, an amazing thing happened. A strong baby girl with many hairs was born in Tainan City. It's me, Vanesa Shi. My father is the tallest person in my family. He is such a humorous person that he always fills the whole family with cheerfulness. My mother is a dependable woman. She teaches me how to do housework. My older sister is good at math, but her English is very bad. On the contrary, my English is better than math. Therefore, we often help each other. I love my family very much.
I have many hobbies. First, I like to read novels and comic books. Reading helps me relax, and I like to go to the school library. It's very convenient. Reading provides me much knowledge. When I am take an exam, there no contact between some question and what we learn in book. Now what we get from outside reading is useful. Second, I like to write articles and poems in Chinese. It helps me not only express my feelings but also keep a record of my daily life. Besides, I got some prizes, and the most unforgettable is the composition contest. In conclusion, my hobbies actually help me a lot in my daily life especially in school.
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