Autobiography--draft 1~ paragraph 1,2
17 years ago, March 24th an amazing thing happened. A strong baby girl with many hairs was born in Tainan city. Who is she ? It's me Vanesa Shi.Who is the tallest person in my family? Of course is my father. My mother is a dependable woman. My older sister is good at math but her Engish is very bad. My English is better than her but my math is bad. So we can help each other. I love my family very much.
I have many hobbies.First I like to read novels and comic books. Reading help me relax. And I like to go to the school library.It 's very convenient. Second I like to write articles and poem in Chinese. It help me not only express my feelings but also keep a record of my daily life.
I have many hobbies.First I like to read novels and comic books. Reading help me relax. And I like to go to the school library.It 's very convenient. Second I like to write articles and poem in Chinese. It help me not only express my feelings but also keep a record of my daily life.
posted by 娜娜 at 7:51 PM
7 Comments:
"My older sister is good at math but her Engish is very bad." "Engish" should change into "English".
"It help me not only express "
the word "help" maybe you should pius "s"
It "helps" me not only express
"My older sister is good at math but her Engish is very bad. " change to " My older sister is good at math ,but her English is very bad."
"First I like to read novels and comic books." should add "," after the "first"
"It's me Vanesa Shi." should add a "," between "It's" and "me".
You like to write poems!!
That's good!!
"First I like to read novels and ....""First,...Second,..."要加逗號。
you are really a strong girl with many power.^ ^
NaNa~your massage skill is good!
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