Tips for keeping healthy---draft 1
There are some tips for keeping healthy.
First of all we need to have a balanced diet.
On the other words we should eat more vegetables and fruit than eat not too salty and sweet.
And drink more water.
Next, do exercise is necessary. And had better do exercise at least 30 minutes 3 times a week.
In addition we should get enough sleep. If we often to go without sleep the whole night, it will hurt our body.
Most importantly we should keep in good mood. If we stay in a good mood, we'll look not only happier but also younger. In concousion, these four tips will help us keeping healthy.
First of all we need to have a balanced diet.
On the other words we should eat more vegetables and fruit than eat not too salty and sweet.
And drink more water.
Next, do exercise is necessary. And had better do exercise at least 30 minutes 3 times a week.
In addition we should get enough sleep. If we often to go without sleep the whole night, it will hurt our body.
Most importantly we should keep in good mood. If we stay in a good mood, we'll look not only happier but also younger. In concousion, these four tips will help us keeping healthy.
posted by 娜娜 at 8:45 PM
8 Comments:
"do exercise" 應該用"doing exercise"
"And had better do exercise....." 這句，應該寫"And you had better do exercise...."
"*First of all we need to have a balanced diet."
Between the all and we should add a ",".
concousion>>>conclusion
and we also shouldn't eat too spicy....^^
"If we often to go without sleep the whole night" you should change into "If we often go without sleeping the whole night"
"If we often to go without sleep the whole night" should change into " If we often don't go to sleep the whole night"
"On the other words" we should...may add a ",".
The title should be "Tips for Staying Healthy---draft 1".
"do exercise is necessary"you should change "do" to"to do"or"doing".
"And had better do exercise at least 30 minutes 3 times a week."
you should change to"And you had better do exercise at least 30 minutes 3 times a week."
"In addition we should get enough sleep. If we often to go without sleep the whole night, it will hurt our body."
you should add a "," on addition and we.
"concousion"you should change to
"conclusion".
"these four tips will help us keeping healthy."you should change "keeping" to "keep".
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